There was a moment of panic upon reaching the end that made me go up and look at the introduction, and---good. More will be forthcoming. Soon, I hope?
I like Lennier appearing in a puff of smoke. It's very appropriate, and on many levels (warning symbols, magic, and his troubled relationship with oxygen, for example). Also, David's instinctual trusting of Lennier is a nice touch.
The aging is good to have, and important. He seems to physically grow older rather suddenly in the show, and here the sudden inability to treat him as a child or an adolescent with a crush not only applies to Delenn but the reader.
And grr. What a cliffhanger. I do look forward to seeing how you treat the Sheridan-Lennier element ("not quite hate" can mean so many things, most of them awful, some of them more positive, and I can't tell which you're going for yet).
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Date: 2004-09-22 12:57 pm (UTC)I like Lennier appearing in a puff of smoke. It's very appropriate, and on many levels (warning symbols, magic, and his troubled relationship with oxygen, for example). Also, David's instinctual trusting of Lennier is a nice touch.
The aging is good to have, and important. He seems to physically grow older rather suddenly in the show, and here the sudden inability to treat him as a child or an adolescent with a crush not only applies to Delenn but the reader.
And grr. What a cliffhanger. I do look forward to seeing how you treat the Sheridan-Lennier element ("not quite hate" can mean so many things, most of them awful, some of them more positive, and I can't tell which you're going for yet).